Thursday, November 17, 2016


These is my writing. It is about 2 brothers,Max and Jack, but then they get split up and they become in the war. I won't spoil any more.
I hope you like it and enjoy

  WALT develop a story to entertain the reader- Zane
Text form: Narrative

Success Criteria
  • Use the Writing Process (Get Ready, Craft, Revising, Editing, Sharing)
  • Structure your narrative through your plan
  • Begins with orientation (setting and main character)
  • Paint a picture with words (descriptive words and actions)
  • Paragraphs (Orientation / Events x3 / Resolution - Ending)
  • My writing goal:

The war

(Do whole story Narrator voice)
Two kingdoms,Two knights,Two armies but no winners let us go to the start of the war and how it all started

Meet Max aka the silver knight and Jack aka the wither knight and these two were brothers until the split up there mum and dad moved mum stayed with Max in USA and dad left with Jack to NZ so the brothers were split apart forever.

A few years later

Everything has changed silver and wither knight tried to save some money to go back and see each over but the could not do it because they didn’t have a job so they could only video chat until the war.

The war began because of a usa person grabbed the native nz animal for a zoo the war was usa vs nz and it was also brother vs brother and who will win the battle the battle went for days tanks everywhere firing rockets that exploded over tanks up.bunkers everywhere but no one stopped until the brothers came the brothers stopped the tanks because it is illegal to kill a child so the tanks stopped so they got the thing that the country's stole silver knight had the kiwi and wither knight had the flag and they gave it back then the war was over
Until next time the story has ended

1 comment:

  1. That is an awesome story.It really hooks me in and I really want to read more.